CONTENTS
FEATURE: Tell prospects why they should call you today
GRAMMAR COACH: Fielding your questions
NET NOTES: Captivating web sites
FINDER'S FEE: Recommend a friendand earn up to $500
Despite the advent of new electronic media, traditional print advertising vehiclesnotably newspapers and direct mailremain viable because e-mail "spam" and telemarketing phone calls annoy most consumers. Commercial companies and nonprofit organizations successfully use print advertising to induce prospects to make a purchase or a charitable donation. But many printed messages fall short of their potential power to generate revenue because their messages don't convince readers to take prompt action.
Consider the advertising appeal by a consultant offering employment background screening and testing. His advertising message declared "eight reasons to call today":
- Over 28 years experience as an FBI agent, homicide detective, and security officer with workplace violence prevention experience;
- Top expertise in his field;
- Highest rated and most dynamic speaker you may ever hear;
- Biographical questionnaires customized for you;
- Cost-effective pricing to comply with clients' budgets;
- No single act of retaliatory violence have resulted from his techniques;
- Integrity;
- No EEO challenges.
Presumably, those are enduring conditions that will remain true next week, or next month. None of them specifies why anyone should call today.
A manufacturer of car wash equipment distributed a flier that said, "Quality products, immediate shipping and assistance from experienced staff are just some of the reasons to call today."
Wrong. Customers expect suppliers to offer high quality, prompt shipping and experienced help every day.
A heating and air conditioning equipment firm distributed a direct-mail flyer that declared, "Here are a few of the many reasons to CALL TODAY." The reasons:
- Prompt and friendly service;
- Award-winning installation quality;
- Energy conservationstop overpaying the utility company;
- Ozone-friendly refrigerant;
- Best warranty and service in the industry;
- Keep your family comfortable for the holidays;
- Great financing options.
A skeptical reader might wonder if the service will not be as prompt and friendly tomorrow. Presumably any heating and air conditioning company should offer the services listed. Readers were offered no real incentive to call today.
However, they might be inclined to respond to a limited-time offer, such as free filters for two years with the purchase of a new air-conditioning unit, or a gift certificate for free carpet cleaning service when duct-cleaning maintenance is ordered during the next 30 days. Such a promotion would enable the heating and air conditioning firm to offer customers increased worthwithout devaluing the rates it normally charges.
If you want prospects to call you today, make sure you offer good reasons for them to do so. A community organization can spur donations by emphasizing a looming time limitfor example, for contributions to fund an upcoming anniversary event, or for donors to beat a deadline for engraving their names on a dedicatory plaque.
A photo studio marketing high school senior portraits produced an advertisement in late spring that offered a believable reason for people to "call now": it announced that its May, June and July appointments were sold outand "only a handful of time slots were left in August and September."
That ad created a sense of urgency, and gave readers cause to respond promptly.
The next time you're asked to prepare an advertisement or sales letter, review the appeal message critically and honestly. Would the message grab your attention if it turned up in your mailbox or in the pages of your newspaper? Would you respond to it? Or would it strike you as just another insincere sales pitch that doesn't take your interests to heart?
If your message doesn't incite readers to call today, it is destined to go directly into their recycling bin. Make sure you give them a compelling reason to pay attention and respond promptly.
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Kathy Garvey submitted this month's question:
"Solve this: 'General pest management decision making for insects and mites, weeds, diseases, and nematodes.'
In this text, do you include a hyphen between 'decision' and 'making'?"
The grammar coach replies:
When used as a compound adjective, "decision-making" should be hyphenated, as in "his decision-making authority was questioned." However, no consensus appears to exist about whether "decision making" should appear as an open compound (two words), closed compound (single word) or in hyphenated form when used as a compound noun.
Most compound nouns involving "making" are closed, as in: bookmaking, cabinetmaking, dressmaking, filmmaking, matchmaking, moneymaking, noisemaking, peacemaking, printmaking, rainmaking and shoemaking. One exception is "policy making," which dictionaries show in open as well as hyphenated form.
However, neither "decisionmaking" nor "decision-making" appears in the Cambridge Dictionary of American English, the Oxford Dictionaries, the American Heritage Dictionary or Merriam-Webster Online.
Curiously, the American Heritage Dictionary uses the noun form inconsistently; it appears in both open and hyphenated forms in the definitions for other entries. The definition for "business ethics" begins: "the study and evaluation of decision making..." (open); but the definition for "groupthink" begins "the act or practice of reasoning or decision-making..." (hyphenated).
The on-line version of the U.S. Government Printing Office Style Manual includes a page on compounding examples in which "decisionmaking" is shown as a closed word.
Our recommendation: We'd discourage the closed and hyphenated forms because they are excluded from the four dictionaries cited. By default, we'd recommend the open form ("decision making") as a compound noun.
Thanks for submitting your question, Kathy!
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